【質問 No. 23448】 英作文の添削依頼 |
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2023-11-19 05:34:30 |
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課題: Are prisons an effective way to maintain our society?
1. 「私は、刑務所は、私達の社会を維持するために、効率的な方法だという意見に反対だ」
I disagree with the idea that prisons are an effective way to maintain our society, for the following reasons.
2. 「驚くべきことに、私達の社会には、貧困や孤独が原因で、自分から進んで刑務所に入りたがる高齢者がいる」
Surprisingly, in our society today, there exist a large number of elderly people who are willing to enter a prison due to their poverty and solitary.
3. 「家族も、金も仕事もない高齢者は、安全と衣食住を提供してくれる場所を求めて、わざと再犯を犯し、刑務所へ戻っている」
Such senior citizens without their family, money, and work often go back to the prison, seeking for a place that can offer sefty and clothing, food and housing.
4. 「しかしながら、刑務所は、ホテルや宿泊施設ではない」
However, prisons are not hotels and accommodation.
よろしくお願い致します。
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【回答】
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1. I disagree with the idea that prisons are an effective way to maintain our society, for the following reasons.
2. Surprisingly, in our society today, there exists a large number of elderly people who are willing to enter prison due to their poverty and solitude.
3. Such senior citizens without their family, money, and work often go back to prison, seeking a place that can offer safety and clothing, food, and housing.
4. However, prisons are not hotels and accommodations.
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