【質問 No. 23359】 英作文の添削依頼 |
zoro |
2023-11-09 18:01:22 |
先生、ご添削ありがとうございました。本日は、Medical technology <are>(→is) beneficial to society. の添削をお願い致します。
1. 「今や、若者の間で、整形手術は、一般的なものとなっている」
Now that, kind of plastic surgery has become common among young people.
2. 「より多くの人達が、不必要な美容治療に夢中になり、多額の金を費やしている」
More and more people are absorbed in it for unnecessary beauty care and spend a huge amount of money on it.
3. 「しかしながら、整形手術は外見が原因で起こるいじめを食い止める手段となる」
However, plastic surgery can become an avenue to prevent bullying caused by appearance.
4. 「結論として、病気や怪我意外の医療技術も、社会にとって有益だ」
In conclusion, medical technology except diseases and injury can be useful in society as well.
本日も、よろしくお願い致します。
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【回答】
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1. Nowadays, plastic surgery has become common among young people.
2. It seems that many people are absorbed in plastic surgery for unnecessary beauty care and are
spending a huge amount of money on it.
3. On the other hand, however, there's another aspect to plastic surgery that can provide an avenue to prevent bullying caused by appearances.
4. In conclusion, therefore, medical technology like plastic surgery is not only useful for beauty care but also for curing diseases and injuries.
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