【質問 No. 24820】 英文要約の添削依頼 |
zoro |
2024-05-23 09:31:39 |
おはようございます。本日も、英文要約の、添削をお願い致します。
[原文] The ongoing discussion about the necessity of improving public safety in public spaces is a crucial issue in contemporary society. This concern arises from the increasing incidents of violence and crime in urban areas, necessitating a comprehensive approach to enhance safety and security for all citizens. Public safety in public spaces encompasses a wide range of areas including crime prevention, emergency response, and environmental design. One of the primary strategies for improving public safety is through effective law enforcement and crime prevention measures. Increased police presence in high-risk areas, community policing initiatives, and modern surveillance technologies play significant roles in deterring criminal activities. Furthermore, emergency response systems need to be robust and efficient to deal with incidents swiftly and minimize harm. Another critical aspect of public safety is the design of public spaces.
Urban planning and design can contribute significantly to safety by incorporating features such as good lighting, clear sightlines, and open layouts that discourage criminal behavior and enhance the perception of safety. However, enhancing public safety in public spaces also presents challenges. There is a delicate balance between ensuring security and preserving individual freedoms and privacy. Over-surveillance and excessive police presence can lead to concerns about civil liberties and the potential for discrimination. Additionally, there is the challenge of ensuring equitable safety measures across different neighborhoods, avoiding the creation of heavily policed zones while other areas remain neglected.
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【回答】
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The importance of public safety in public spaces cannot be overstated, as it directly impacts the quality of life and well-being of the community. Effective strategies require a multifaceted approach that includes law enforcement, community involvement, and thoughtful urban design. The goal is to create environments where all individuals feel safe and secure, contributing to a cohesive and thriving society.
[解答](要約) With violence and <crime>(→crimes) <in urban areas increasing>(→increasing in urban areas), improving <public>(→the public) environment becomes <increasing>(→increasingly) necessary. Increased police existence in high-risk areas and <increase the number>(→the increased number) of safety <technology>(→devices) such as security cameras become <deterrent>(→a deterrent) <power>(→measure) to prevent crimes. However, some <are>(→削除) dislike over-surveillance and excessive police presence in terms of privacy. <Improving>(→Thus, improving) public safety can play <the>(→an) important role <to secure>(→in securing) the lives of people. To contribute to <help>(→helping) people live a safe life, it is necessary to create <environments>(→an environment) where all individuals feel <relief>(→safe) and comfortable.
safety technology は、調べたところ、「和製英語」になっているようなのですが、一応使いました。本日も、よろしくお願い致します。
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[回答](感想) 要約に、幾つか繰り返しが入っていますが、内容としては、これでいいと思います。毎度のことながら、修正点に注目してください。毎回、清書して、確かめていますか?
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