【質問 No. 22115】 英作文の添削依頼(Version 2) |
zoro |
2023-06-11 16:44:10 |
先生、アドバイスをありがとうございました。2回目となりましたが、昨日の英作文を書き直しましたので、ご添削をよろしくお願い致します。
課題: Should economic development be a higher priority for developing countries than environmental protection?
1. 「私は発展途上国では、環境保護よりも、経済開発を優先すべきだという意見に賛成だ」
I agree with the idea that economic development should be a higher priority for developing countries.
2.「発展途上国の経済開発は極めて難しい。理由は、発展途上国では、貧困のため、子供でさえ家族を支えるために、収入を得なければならないためである」
It is difficult for developing countries to develop their economy, since in developing
countries, even children have to bring incomes to support their family members due to porvety.
3.「子供の頃に、満足な教育を受けることが出来なかった子供達は、将来低賃金の仕事につくしかなく、ただその日を生きるために働くだけで、それが経済発展に繋がることはない」
Children who could not have enough education have no choice but to get a low salary job, so most of them only work to survive hand-to-mouth , which cannot lead to boost economy.
4.「政府が国民に、しっかりと自立を促さない限り、状況が変わることはないだろう」
Unless the government in developing countries encourage people to stand on their own feet, the situation will never change.
本日もよろしくお願い致します。
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【回答】
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1. I agree with the idea that economic development should be a higher priority for developing countries than environmental protection, for the following reasons.
2. It is difficult for developing countries to develop their economy, since in developing
countries, even children have to bring <incomes>(→income) to support their <family members>(→families) due to <porvety>(→poverty).
→ Even though environmental protection should be of the highest priority for any country, the economic situation in many developing countries is such that even small children have to work to support their families.
3. → Besides, even adults who do not have enough education have no choice but to get low-wage jobs, so most of them are living from hand to mouth only to survive, which cannot lead to boosting the economy of their countries.
4. Unless the governments in developing countries encourage <people>(→their people) to stand on their own feet, the situation will never change.
→ Thus, developing countries cannot put a higher priority on environmental protection than economic development even if they want to.
一度、環境保護よりも経済発展に力を入れざるを得ない状況を是認するとなった場合は、その理由を明確に述べなければなりません。その点で、ちょっと歯がゆい議論になってしまいましたね。
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